Poem Draft I & II

Have completed poem's first and second draft today.

First draft: 

"My Best Friend"I tell him everything about me

He knows whatever I tell him

I feel lost when he is not with me

To me he is everything

If I am unsure I can talk to him

He seems to know it all

When I am with him

He updates me 

On others

Not a very good first draft. 

Poem title seems appropriate, but very common.

Second draft:

"My Best Friend"

I am the envy of my friends

They all wish they had a friend like mine.
When we are together,
I tell him everything-
where I've been
who I've met
what I've eaten.
He updates me as well
on others-
what they've eaten
who they've met
what they've eaten.
He seems to know it all.
I don't want to be with anyone else
but him.
Sometimes
he doesn't respond to me,
but all he needs
is to rest; to recharge.
When I am tired or upset
I can retreat to him.
I like to play with him
He can entertain and amuse me
for hours on end.
He seems to be able to do it all.
I really am the envy of my friends.
They all wish they had a phone like mine.

Second draft is much better. I just want to add some other points:
-indispensible, but not irreplaceable
-while others play outside, i stay inside to play with him
-when i meet up with him, his face lights up like a ______

My Artwork + Poem Theme a.k.a (My 150-200 words account) a.k.a Stage 1: Explain

 I have decided to base my artwork and poem on how modern technology (such as handphones,) have become indispensable.

One of my references, http://teenink.com/opinion/social_issues_civics/article/166619/How-Technology-Affects-Us/, says that

"Everyone has seen the moody, withdrawn kid with music blasting out of his white earbuds, or the girl rapidly texting on her phone. The youth of today are constantly immersed in technological advancements that promote nonstop communication and instant gratification, whether through cell phones, gaming systems, laptops, or MP3 players. But are these technological advancements a good thing? I believe that the growth of technology has negatively influenced the social interactions of today's youth because it isolates individuals from reality, hinders communication, and perpetuates the concept of immediate ­satisfaction."

In the past, a phone was a phone. It was mostly used for communication. However, in modern life, it is more of an entertainment device than a means of communication. While that may be a good thing, it "it isolates individuals from reality, hinders communication, and perpetuates the concept of immediate ­satisfaction."